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     Imagine a life with bad sanitation that includes flimsy bags filled with human waste called "flying toilets", and the contents of those bags leaching thier way into you food. Some unfortunate people of the world must live in these conditions in certain situations. In general slums are crowded; run down places that have poverty plagued people living along with mud, sewage, and diseases. For reasons such as those, slums negatively affect the human population because they offer disgusting sanitation, contaminated consumer products, and poor shelter conditions for its inhabitants. The first negative factor from the slums that decreases the human population daily, is the nasty sanitation offered by the slums.
    The bad sanitation in the slums has a fatal effect on the population of the slums.Sewage from outer cities and from the slum itself, flows freely through the slums. For example source 1 states, " like the vast majority of Kiberia residents, Musanga and her family have no toilet. They used to make do by sneaking into a nearby outhouse that belonged to someone else." (Fink 1). The quote helps others get a visualization of what the sanitation in the slums is like. Using an outhouse that isnt thiers can lead to diseases for Musangas family because the owners of the outhouse might have a sickness and can pass it on to her family, but because they really have no choice of where to release thier waste other thatn to use a "flying toilet"  tthey must make do by using others restrooms. the idea of disgusting sanitation leads to the next point of contaminated consumer products.
     Contaminated consumer  products in the slums is also another negative factor that negatively affects the population.For example, Fink states in source , " human waste leaches into the water people drink and contaminates the food they eat". Because of the bad sanitation, the human waste finds its way into what the people of the slums eat and leads to many fatal diseases such as typhoid fever, also showing that there is a low standard of living in the slums. The contaminated consumer products wont do the victims/ citizens of the slums any good, but they have no choice but to eat and drink what they have. Coming to the last point, poor shelter is also another dangerous and harmful factor that is negative for the human population.
    poor housing doesnt give sufficient protection against natural disasters or from the sewage luurking around in the slums. In addition the small mud and cardboard shacks used for shelter, arent big enough for the amount of people living in there, forcing uncomfort upon many of them. When being interviewed in source 2, and asked about the housing of the slums, Onergera, a former slum resident commented," the houses are made of mud and theyre very crowded. and the slum is very dirty as you can see"( Blythe 2). the houses described in the source can come apart very easily when exposed to precipitation or a natural disaster because theyre made of mud and cardboard. since the houses can come apart easily, they wont protect its inhabitants from natural disasters, and that can make them get severly wounded or die because of the lack of protection. Coming to an end, all the factors mentioned, in addition to many others, all give slums the characteristics of a death trap that reveals no escape for its victims/ residents.
     in conclusion, the slums have a fatal effect of the human population.They offer horrible sanitation that lets human waste  lurk throughout the slums and leach into thier food, the bad sanitation leads to the contaminated consumer products of the slums and it can bring many fatal diseases, infections, and viruses into ther system, and the poor shelter conditions doesnt give sufficient space  or protection for thier inhabitants.all of these factors together make slums negative for the population, and horrible regions to live in. Now imagine  poverty plagued people who must live in the unsanitary conditions of the slums because of ther lack of money, and to them there is no escape from the slums. the only choice for them is die off one by one because of the bad living conditions. what can you do to be a global advocate?

rough draft

     Imagine a life withisgusting sanitation that includes flimsy plastic bags filled with human waste called "flying toilets", and the contents of those bags get into your food. thats disgusting. in general slums are just crowded, rundown places that have people with poor economy living along with mud, flting toilets, and sewege all over the place. And for reasons such as those, slums negatively affect the human poplulation because they offer nasty sanitation, dirty consumer products, and poor housing. so to start, slums offer bad sanitation for its inhabitants.
      the bad sanitation in the slums is a factor in the slums that is killing off the population little by little. The sewage from the outside cities and from the slum itself runs freely through the slums.For example in source one it states," Like the vast majority of Kiberia residents, Musanga and her family have no toilet. they used to make doby sneaking into a nearby outhouse that belongs to someone else."( fink 1). The quote gives an example or the imagery of what people in the slums must do to go to the restroom. they really have no choice of where to go so the just " go" herever they can. this nasty sanitation leads to the next point of slums offering dirty consumer products.
      dirty consumer products in the slums is also another factor that negatively affects the population. As an example Fink states in soure 1," human waste leaches into the water people drink and contaminates the food they eat."Because of the bad sanitation, it contaminates the food and the water the residents iof the slums consume thus leading to typhoid fever and many other fatal diseases killing off the human population in the slums, showing that there is also a low standard of living there. the contaminated food and water is  not healthy for the victims/ citizens of the slums but the people there have no choice but to consume that. coming to the last point, poor housing is also another dangerous factor that kills off the population and is offered by the slums.
     poor housing doesnt give sufficient protection against natural disasters or from the sewage lurking around in the slums. in addition the smalll mud shacks used for shelter in the slums arent big enough for the amount of people living there, forcing them to be uncomfortable. When being interviewed in source 2, and asked about the housing in the slums, Onergera a former slum resident answered, " The houses are made of mud and theyre very crowded. And the slum is very dirty as you can see." the houses described in the source can come apart very easily when rain comes because theyre made of mud and cardboard. since the houses can come apart easily, they wont protect the people inside from natural disasters. Coming to an end, all the factors mentioned, in addition with many otgers, make slums death traps that are negative for the population and offer no escape for its inhabitants.
    In conclusion, the slums have a very negative affect of the population of the world. they offer horrible sanitation that leaves human urine and feeces throughout the slums and in thier homes, the sewage leaks into the consumer products and causes many fatal diseases and infections, and the poor housing doesnt give sufficient protection or space for the people living inside of it.All of these factors together make slums a horrible place to live in and are negative for the human population. now imagine all the poverty plagued people/ residents of the slums who ,must live in these conditions because they have no escape from it and have no other choice but to die off one by one because of the slums. what can you do to help?

introduction paragraph

Imagine a life with disgusting sanitation that includes flimsy plastic bags with human waste called "flying toilets" and the contents of those bags get into your food. Thats disgusting. In general slums are just crowded, run down places that have people with poor economy living along with mud, flying toilets, and sewage all over the place.And for reasons such as those, slums negatively affect human population because they offer nasty sanitation, dirty consumeable products, and poor housing. so to prove that slums are death traps hurting the human population and there is no escape for the victims/citizens of the slums, we move on to the first point.

outline

1.Introduction
      A.imagine a life with disgusting sanitation with "flying toilets" and waste all over the place that it even gets into your food.....
      B.slums are crowded, poor areas of life that lack resources,sanitation, and living space.
      C. slums negatively affect human populations because of bad sanitation, dirty consumeable products, and poor housing
      D.so to describe how slums are practically death traps with no escaping,here is one of the reasons why...

2.Defendable point 1
     A. There is disgusting sanitation in slums that bring a tragic reality of victims/citizens of them
     B."basic sanitation.like the vast majority of kiberia residents, musanga and her family have no toilet. they used to make do by sneaking into a nearby outhousethat belongs to some one else.[...] flying toilets- flimsy bags filled with human waste'
    C. people living in the slums really have no place to go to the restroom so they just "go" where they can, and in addition the city sanitation runs freely through the slums.
    D.this nasty sanitation leads to the next point of dirty water also partially containing some of the human waste.

3. Defendable point 2
   A.dirty water in the slums is also a factor that makes slums death traps and negative for the human population
   B. " human waste leaches into the water people drink and conataminates the food they eat."
   C.because the bad sanitation it conatminates the food and water the people in the slums drink and can lead to typhoid fever and many other fatal diseases.
   D.poor housing is alsoe one of the dangerous factors of why slums are negative for the population

4. Defendable point 3
   A.poor housing doesnt give suffiecient space for the amount of people living there and lacks protection against natural disasters
   B."The houses are made of mud and they're very crowded. And the slum is very dirty you can see."
   C.houses made of mud can come apart when it rains and cannot protect against a raging storm coming agaisnt them. and they muds huts not really houses are too small for all the people that live there.
   D.coming to and end, slums are death traps that really have no escape for the residents of it.

5. Conclusion
   A. its not even imaginable or desireable to live in the nasty conditions that are practically death traps for human populations,called slums.
   B.so in all slums offer horrible sanitation that leaves waste all over the living space, that bad sanitation leaks into whatever the slum resident decide to consume such as water, and the poor housing doesnt have sufficient protection or space to maintain a family.
   C.bad sanitation can lead to many diseases, dirty water bad for the slum residents health, and poor housing can kill bcause it doesnt protect the people inside and all these factors are negative for the population.
   D.so in all, imagine these poor people in great amounts living in these conditions and have no escape and dying one by one every day

    

Thesis statement

Slums negatively affect human populations and the environment through poor sanitation, dirty consumeable products, and poor housing.